tutorial with leonie

today, i talked the story with leonie, she give me some useful suggestions. here it is:
1, it is need to keep transform smooth and pretty, not to many, keep a smooth rhythm to direct the story
2, show clear the direction of the bird, which is to show the two journey of the bird:go and back.
3, on the returning journey of the bird need to show how hard the task for the bird.
4, the sea-face of the man need on the same side. this detail information is very important but i ignore it

something about the ending
in leonie's opinion my story with a sad ending, that's because this couple be together at the end but after died. maybe i can think about the other happy ending. here is her suggestion, they transform to a human they dancing together then rotating together to the YING YANG at the end.

what i'm thinking
1,the important plot of the story line is the couple transform to the bird and the sea starting with the storm then maybe the bird and the sea can be back to human.
2, show montage of repetition of stone filling journey then how to connect other shots.

i will redraw the rough storyboard give a clear structure of the story and starting animation.

tutorial with matthrew

this video was done by yesterday, i show it to matthrew. it is some animation ideas.  i talked with mat mainly to solve the problem for camera moving on paper, how to show depth and energy in this abstract film. also i add some more scenes to show how hard for the bird to pick up stones. 

my test for animation style

interesting video

the rough storyboard

this is the rough storyboard for the final film. i try to use the abstract way to tell this story. it begins with 'YIN YANG' which means every two opposite things,but alive rely on each other. for example, the man and women, they are the two opposite people in the nature. however, the human developing needs man and women rely on each other to achieve it. so many things like this in our life, such as day and night, sun and moon, and so on. This just the idea for the film. i will do some develop in the drawing process.

After present this to others, i got these problem need to solve:

first, it need add more shots angle, most of the shots in the storyboard are too flat.

second, it still need to add more dynamic shots and movement to rich the visual effect.

third, it would be better add more shot to keep the story line clear.